This poem woke me up and wouldn’t leave me alone. The rhythm feels slightly off towards the last line but it insists it’s following the pattern of lilting and drifting, rhyming within to produce sound and feeling.
Let me know what you think.
Keep on rubbing away my self belief;
Leave me hollow, a vacuous leaf drifting
Through time with no purpose, no-one to declare
My self worth was something there, now lost
In what you have bequeathed to me.
My so-called partner through life – whose
purpose was in defending me, at any cost,
Your lover, protecting her from harm; such charm
Now just a shadow, rinsed free.
I’m going back to sleep now!
Ah, very poignant and powerful, Eloise.
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Thank you Robbie. π
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Yes indeed, powerful, deep and I feel a strong sadness there.ππ
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Thank you Willow. π
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It’s a love poem π
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So much feeling, leaves a funny feeling in the pit of my tummy!
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Now thatβs a different reaction! Is that good or bad?
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*funny = emotional
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